The countdown had started. “54321! Blast off!” Screamed the driver (His name was Edwin). The rocket started to shudder then, BOOM! Off it soared. Edwin and Ben didn’t Know that another creature had crawled on. They forgot to check the rocket! Three days passed Edwin and Ben were still in the rocket. Ben put some pepper on his food, suddenly something started to sneeze. Then out of nowhere a crocodile appeared! “Arghh!” Ben screamed. Then Ben felt sorry for him. Ben patted it. He was soft! The crocodile was orange. With a puff of smoke, it disappeared. He was never seen again.
Hi Tai, I really like this story and I can see that you have tried really hard with your punctuation especially your use of speech marks. Well done!
ReplyDeleteJacqui (Team 100)